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Many people use social media every day to get in touch with others and New events. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

#people #media #touch #events #outweigh
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"Social
media
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 is not a
media
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. The key is to listen, engage, and build relationships" _Daivd Alston.
However
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,
today
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technology
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became
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has become
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integral
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an integral
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 portion of
ours
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our
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life
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lives
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.
According
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, unfortunately,
front
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the front
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 line has been impacting
in
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apply
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our life either pro or
nor
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not
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. In
this
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article
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article,
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 I will highlight the influence of fore front in
our's
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our
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 social life specifically. On the one hand, in the past, people used plain technologies to contact
with
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each other like telegraph, fax and traditional phones.
Moreover
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, surely, through
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this
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these
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 old methods
individual
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individuals
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 faced a vast difficulty to transmitted each
others
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other
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, massage may be
catched
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caught
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 a long
time
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 until
reached
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reach
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 to
receiver
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the receiver
a receiver
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. In spite of,
person
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people
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 in Past, they spent a lot of
time
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 with each other especially those who stayed in one venue because they had much
time
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 free. On the other side,
today
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the
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recent
technology
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 appears, and the universe knows social
media
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. What is more, social
media
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such
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 as Facebook,
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
, Twitter, Snapchat,
instrgam
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Instagram
 and others make connections among people easier
more
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and more.indeed,
today
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 you can arrange a voice or
vedio
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video
 call easily and costless to anyone in the world wherever your place.
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, social
media
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 has
influence
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an influence
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 negative to real contact between people who
today
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 are busy
by
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in
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 a virtual world, even the members of family do not have
a
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apply
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time
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 to talk with each
others
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other
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.
To sum up
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, l
bileve
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believe
 that the revolution in the field of
technology
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 is a precious thing that must exploit
it
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apply
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in the best way.
Furthermore
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,
this
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 is the
technology
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 century _
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the information
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information
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the information
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 revolution _
then
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 must
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use
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uses
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use
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these
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this
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these
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 recent methods to
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grow
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growing
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grow
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 our abilities and our world, and must not make
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apply
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the
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apply
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technology
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 a reason to come back.
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structure
It's essential to present your ideas clearly and logically. Begin with an introduction that paraphrases the question and states your opinion. Follow this with body paragraphs that discuss the advantages and disadvantages, each with a clear topic sentence. Conclude by summarizing your opinion.
coherence
Work on the clarity and coherence of your essay. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that your sentences flow logically from one to the next. Use linking words effectively to help the reader understand the connections between your ideas.
task response
Try to respond directly to the question posed, ensuring that you discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of social media. Your conclusion should clearly state whether you believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, as the question asks.
grammar and vocabulary
Improve your grammar and spelling to enhance the readability of your text. Pay attention to sentence structure, verb tense consistency, and the proper use of articles. Proofreading your essay can help identify and correct these errors.
examples and support
Include specific examples to support your points. Rather than just stating that social media has positive or negative effects, describe specific situations or studies that illustrate these effects. This will make your argument more convincing.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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