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nowadays genetically modified food products are widespread throughout the world. while proponents of (genetically modified) GM crops ensure that these foods are safe for human consumption and help increase supplies, others argue that their health effects have not been studied long enough. discuss both the advantages and disadvantages.

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In the past
decades
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 there
have
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 been an increase in genetically modified
food
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 products around the world. Some experts
claimed
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 that genetically modified
food
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 is safe for human
consumption
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, and it could be the answer to
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a
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food
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 scarcity.
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, we do not have
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 study that shows
this
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 type of
food
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 is safe to consume in the long run.
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 topic has been
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controversy
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 for a long time because of its various advantages and disadvantages. There are several benefits linked to the invention of genetically modified
food
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 products. When crops are planted in
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area
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 with low soil
quality
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, the
quality
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 of the crops
decreased
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resulted
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 in
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relatively small size and low nutrients.
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,
this
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 can be improved by using fertilizer to genetically enhance the
quality
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 through the addition of synthetic
vitamin
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vitamins
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 and compounds, which resulted in a bigger crop size, elevated taste, and enhanced nutrients. The same technique is
also
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 applied in the farmhouses, where cows and chickens were given hormones to improve their weight, fat content and fertility. With the modification of size and nutrients in the
food
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, the quantity and
quality
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 of
food
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 increased, which is helpful for
food
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 supply
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 in the area where
food
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 scarcity is likely to happen.
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, some
nation
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has
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 shown that the
consumption
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 of genetically modified foods negatively impacts
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health. In America, where the
consumption
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 of
this
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 kind of
food
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 is high, there
have
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 been a significant increase in the number of obese individuals within the
last
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 decades.
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, from
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 recent study, the
consumption
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 of
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meat that previously
have
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 been treated with growth hormones has
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make
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 children hit
their
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puberty sooner than ever.
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, the synthetic compounds used in the fertilizer improved the risk of
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 and cancer,
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 fertility issues
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 as PCOS. In conclusion, despite
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various benefits regarding genetically modified
food
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 products, there are
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 some risks imposed
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human’s
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human
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 health with prolonged
consumption
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.
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, people should be aware of the pros and cons before consuming
this
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food
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 category.

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task response
To improve your task response, ensure you address both sides of the argument comprehensively. Your essay does provide an overview of the pros and cons of genetically modified foods but expanding your discussion with more detailed examples and in-depth analysis will better fulfill the task.
task response
Work on developing clear and comprehensive ideas by deploying more detailed examples and analysis. The use of precise data or studies could strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, ensure a smooth flow between paragraphs and within them. Using linking words effectively and varying them can greatly help. Also, organizing your ideas in a logical sequence will enhance the coherence of your essay.

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