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Every year several languages die out.Some people think that this is not important because life be easier it there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Every year some
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people
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 when there are fewer
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life easier and
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people
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people
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 and they do not have any problems with
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 it is a big problem and might the
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people
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life
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 will be easier when there are some
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 a
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 there are several
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 and when the
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, years
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 not let extinct
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people
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some
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their
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in their
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country
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 because they learn
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 parents and now the
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 have to learn and speak with children about
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 they speak together and it is important for
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task achievement
To improve task response, ensure that you fully address the question by offering a clear position throughout your essay. Expand on your ideas by providing specific examples and detailed explanations to justify your opinion.
coherence cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, structure your essay into clear paragraphs, each with a single main idea that is expanded upon with examples or explanations. Use linking words to connect ideas both within and between paragraphs.
task achievement
Enhance the clarity and comprehensiveness of your ideas by planning your essay before writing. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that your arguments are logically developed and supported by specific examples or evidence.
general
Work on your grammar and vocabulary. A wider range of vocabulary and accurate grammatical structures will significantly improve the quality of your writing. Avoid repetition by using synonyms and varied sentence structures.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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