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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The number of
society
 living in urban areas
in
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 different
continents
are
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is
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 illustrated
through
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in
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 the bar chart. As shown, the percentage of folks who
lived
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live
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 in urban
place
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places
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in
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on
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 every
continents
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continent
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had
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has
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 increased year by year. Africa and Asia were
lowest
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the lowest
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continents
 with
society
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a society
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 living in
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the city
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city
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cities
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 below 20% in 1950,
while
 the rest of
continents
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the continents
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 had reached more than 35% of people who lived in a
development
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developing
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 environment.
However
 the
behavior
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 of
society
 changed, it showed that in 2007, the
comunity
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community
 who stayed in
township
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the township
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 had significantly
grew
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grown
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 up to nearly a fourth for Africa and just over a
forth
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fourth
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 for Asia.
Therefore
, it predicts in 2050, the population lives in
metropolis
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metropolises
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 will reach more than
a
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apply
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half.
furthermore
,
In
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west
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the west
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 side of the world, the data show the same trend which gradually rose. In 1950,
society
 who loved to spend
their
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the
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 rest of their life in
township
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the township
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were
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was
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 around 40% to 60%, as time flies,
this
 population went up to roughly a three quarter, and in the future, in 2050, Europe,
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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, and North America will have nearly 90% to 90%,
while
 Oceanic will slightly climb to just over a three quarter
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words society, continents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Percentage (%)
  • Population
  • Continents
  • Developed vs Developing
  • Growth rate
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Technological factors
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Anomalies
  • Trend
  • Projection
  • Implication
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