The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand from 1901 and its predicted year in 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand from 1901 and its predicted year in 2101.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The proffered line chart provides information about the
rates
of
birth
and death changes in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Broadly, it is readily noticeable that the number of
death
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deaths
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experienced a
significance
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growth compared to the
birth
rates
which showed
the the
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a
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downward trend in its projection. In terms of
birth
rates
, it started at a fifth per cent at the beginning of the period
,
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and showed a fluctuation data between 1910 and 1931.
In addition
, the
rates
reported fast growth and peaked at approximately
two-third
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two-thirds
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. It fluctuated but still
contributing
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a decrease, it is predicted to decline in 2101
about
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45%.
In contrast
, there was a huge improvement related to the
birth
rates
.
Nevertheless
, a slight fluctuation
shown
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was shown
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from 1901 to 2001.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, the trend plummeted and it is
forcasted
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forecasted
forecast
to increase considerably in 2061. Interestingly, the
rates
of
Birth
in New Zealand will be reported stable in percentage as it is predicted to be quite constant in 2101.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, birth with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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