Today, people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on pp’s lives? To you agree or disagree
An increasing number of
advertisement
has led Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
atrocious
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to atrocious
notion
about the negative effects Fix the agreement mistake
notions
for
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on
people
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people's
mindset
caused by advertising. In my opinion, I agree that Fix the agreement mistake
mindsets
this
can led
to negative repercussions which Change the verb form
lead
is
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are
situation
and Fix the agreement mistake
situations
also
problems later on in life.
One serious problem that can arise from advertising is that overconsumer. Before the
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apply
advertise
, Replace the word
advertising
people
frequently buy
something based on Wrong verb form
bought
the
needs, Change the word
their
whereas
, now they prefer to purchase anything because of the attraction. As a result
, people
will have high tax
from expenditure on goods that are not utterly valuable. Overconsumer of Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
this
kind is not healthy and sometimes lead
to detrimental effects Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
such
as depression, anxiety and other possible issues.
Another issue is that surrounding edvertisements
can be risky. Correct your spelling
advertisements
In other words
, as well as
an increasing amount of cybercrime, people
can assume fake advertise
online which is actually fraud to gain more money. Wrong verb form
advertising
This
is particularly concerning for teenagers who are impresionable
and can Correct your spelling
impressionable
easely
be led into Correct your spelling
easily
dangerous
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a dangerous
the dangerous
situation
. Fix the agreement mistake
situations
In addition
, as this
interactioon
is online, parents have no way of monitoring it and protecting their children.
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interaction
Finally
, advertising can end in difficulties years later because of the increasing demand and tax that should be paid which is as
a Change preposition
apply
consequency
of watching Correct your spelling
consequence
to
much advertisement. Replace the word
too
This
situation is critical for many people
, again especially
for teenagers who do not Add the comma(s)
, especially
thing
critically before Correct your spelling
think
purchase
something just to follow the trend through the internet and in society. Change the verb form
purchasing
Furthermore
, many vulnerable children who are exposed by
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to
promotion
of unhealthy food will yearn to always eat the food and Correct article usage
the promotion
this
desire can lead to domino
effect later of obesity
In conclusion , Correct article usage
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although
advertising goods and others has
become more popular for Change the verb form
have
people
nowadays, I believe that it also
has brought about too many problems for society.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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