Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to the main subjects. Others belive opositely. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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studying in universities. It is widely
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that
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focus to be on
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subject for good
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extra curricular
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subjects are
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the top of the interest of other students. I will discuss both these points and will explain my opinion in
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essay. On one hand,
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,
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learners
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who encompass activities with
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a primary
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curriculum can
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their
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with a wide range of experience.
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, different kinds of activities give new skills to achieve the target
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as
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, critical thinking,
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reasoning which lead to
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right decision at
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right time in future.
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, if a student
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co-subjects including photography, sports and digital editing technology with
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subject not only they can
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acquire
knowledge from the primary
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but
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have new ideas and information regarding other fields which
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them as a multi-talented person.
For instance
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, most of the job interviews check extra skills and knowledge with their
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, many universities around the world promote and facilitate
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activities by giving credits for co-subjects in the curriculum which have to be calculated with their total credits to decide the division of class for graduation.
On the other hand
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, if a student involves more in co-studies, the learner may
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less time for
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further
studies and some pupils have no interest
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the course.
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, they can not achieve the required score for
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degree completion. It will
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an impact on
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their psycological
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psycological
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psychological
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when they enter
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the
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society without a
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. In conclusion, equal involvements in main
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co-subjects enhance a wide range of career pathways with various skills and knowledge rather than focusing
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solely
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field. I believe that students can become
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multi-talented
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people
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person
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people
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without mental problems with
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proper planning and time management.
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