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The chart shows requests for in formations at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from january to June. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart shows requests for in formations at a tourist office in the United Kingdom from january to June. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The line graph shows
a
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the
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number
 of requests that
tourist
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the tourist
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 office got for the
informations
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information
pieces of information
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 in the UK from January to
June
.
Overall
,
while
 tourists tend to visit in
person
 or by telephone, they
shows
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show
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an
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a
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 downward
trends
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trend
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 in sending
letter
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letters
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 or
email
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emails
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. In detail, the
number
 of
in
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in-person
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person
request
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requests
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 was the lowest in January. Both
in
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in-person
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person
 and by telephone increased significantly from April to
June
. In
Febuarary
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February
,
requesting
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requests
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 in
person
was
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apply
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increased slightly to 600, they became the
less
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fewer
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 differences between
three
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the three
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 ways. In March, the proportion of in
person
override
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overrides
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 the proportion of by letter/ email. Following that, visiting in
person
become
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became
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 the most
frequency
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frequent
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 way to get tour information in April, going beyond the
number
 of by telephone.
Also
, the
number
 of
requesting
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requests
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 in
person
 recorded the highest
number
 in
June
by
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apply
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approximately 1900.
However
, by letter/ email was the lowest
number
 by 1500 much less than in
person
 in
June
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, june, person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "informations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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