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Million of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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 any research. What is more, many
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structure
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each part should have a distinct purpose: introducing the topic, discussing arguments, and summarizing your opinion.
logical structure
Work on developing a more coherent argument by logically organizing your points. One way to achieve this is by planning your essay before you start writing.
cohesion
Use linking words to connect sentences and paragraphs smoothly. Phrases like 'furthermore', 'in addition', and 'however' help guide the reader through your argument, but make sure they properly match the logic of your text.
supporting points
Expand and support your main points with concrete examples and explanations. General statements are less persuasive than those which are supported by specifics. If you mention a claim, try to back it up with evidence or a detailed example.
task response
Focus on fully addressing the task by discussing both sides of the argument or clearly explaining why you agree or disagree with the prompt. Make sure your position is clear throughout the essay, not only in the conclusion.
language
Proofread your essay to correct grammatical errors and improve sentence structure. Using a range of sentence structures and vocabulary can also make your writing more engaging and clearer.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • technological advancements
  • scientific discoveries
  • astronomy
  • satellites
  • international collaboration
  • economic benefits
  • living standards
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • healthcare
  • poverty reduction
  • distribute funds
  • resource allocation
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