The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of the
salmon
's life cycle. They describe three stages that adress
how Correct your spelling
address
salmon
grow about
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for about
10years
.
In the first stage, they were in Correct your spelling
10 years
upper
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the upper
an upper
river
by status
of Add an article
the status
egg
. Correct article usage
the egg
Salmon
's egg
are smaller than the small stones located beside them, below the reeds. Fix the agreement mistake
eggs
Also
, upper
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the upper
river
shows slow moves. In addition
, in 5-6 months, they become a fry which called
the youngest Add a missing verb
is called
salmon
. Next,
frys move to the lower river
where flow
fast Correct subject-verb agreement
flows
then
stay for 4years. Following that, they become almost threefold bigger than before, they move to the open sea. Finally
, they become adult salmon
which has
approximately 5-6 times larger than smolt. After the Verb problem
is
5year
, adult Correct your spelling
5 years
salmon
go back to upper
Add an article
the upper
river
where they initially
came from.Submitted by yzzknzw on
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