The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of the
salmon
's life cycle. They describe three stages that
adress
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address
how
salmon
grow
about
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10years
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10 years
. In the first stage, they were in
upper
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the upper
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river
by
status
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the status
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of
egg
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the egg
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.
Salmon
's
egg
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are smaller than the small stones located beside them, below the reeds.
Also
,
upper
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river
shows slow moves.
In addition
, in 5-6 months, they become a fry which
called
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the youngest
salmon
.
Next,
frys move to the lower
river
where
flow
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fast
then
stay for 4years. Following that, they become almost threefold bigger than before, they move to the open sea.
Finally
, they become adult
salmon
which
has
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approximately 5-6 times larger than smolt. After the
5year
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5 years
, adult
salmon
go back to
upper
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the upper
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river
where they
initially
came from.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, river with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "moves" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • life cycle
  • species
  • freshwater
  • marine habitat
  • larvae
  • fry
  • smolts
  • spawn
  • anadromous
  • survival rates
  • migrate/migration
  • vulnerability
  • adaptation
  • maturation
  • environmental conditions
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