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Global need to find more Oil and gas resources. Do you agree?

#oil #gas #resources
World
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need
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 more resources to increase the amount of fossil
need
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 which will help some other countries with growing
up
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thier
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their
economy
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economies
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 and
improve
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people
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 lives. Discovering more
field
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 will
be
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definitely make some
differences
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 by decreasing the prices around the globe.
Additionally
, that could be beneficial for
people
 with low income and might be open
jobs
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 opportunities.
In
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other
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 hand,
that
is
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may cause many health issues to
people
,
anmales
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animals
 and cause global
worming
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warming
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.
For example
, In
the
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oils
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oil
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countries
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 the atmosphere could be not good for
people
 to live in the industrial city and need to live far
.
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Furthermore
, that may
effect
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on
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our health and lives in the future. Surely, the oils and full industries have
dvantacges
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advantages
 and disadvantages. But, the
word
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world
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 still need fouls
which
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it is difficult to live without oil
and
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beacuse
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because
there
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 variety of machines run on the full
such
 as electricity, ships,
airplanes
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 and there are too many more.
Moreover
, it
need
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 more focus on the best ways to reduce the side effects of finding oils
filed
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 which cannot
effect
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affect
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over
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the natural, earth, human and
animals
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 lives.
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Introduction & Conclusion
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Paragraphing & Linking
Organize ideas into clear, logical paragraphs. Each paragraph should have a main idea and supporting sentences. Transition smoothly between paragraphs.
Supporting Examples
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Sentence Structure
Avoid overly complex sentences with multiple ideas. Instead, aim for clarity with simpler, well-constructed sentences.
Proofreading
Proofread your essay to correct spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors.
Depth of Argument
Expand on your ideas by demonstrating how oil and gas exploration impacts various aspects of life and the environment. Offer potential solutions or alternatives.
Vocabulary Range
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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