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A friend of yours is thinking about applying for the same course you did at university.He/She has asked for your advice about this subject.

#friend #course #university #advice
Dear my friend I am writing to you to make the necessary choice for your study life. You know I have been studying
in
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 one of the best
university
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universities
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 in our country.And you know I am learning mathematics in that
university
course
. The main purpose that I am writing about is that if you
come
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university
course
 you will get
high
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a high
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 degree diploma. And if you
decided
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 to
come
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 our
course
.You just need to require
school
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 degree. Our
university
 will supply
apartment
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 and
also
 free
foods
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. When you start our
course
 knowledgeable teachers share their experience with you and give you all the necessary information about the subjects that you chose. About the
cost
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 if you pay
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payment before the study starts our director would be grateful and he will give you a 75
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 discount for two months. The
apply
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application
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 day will start next month be quick because you will be late if you do not apply next month. I hope you have got
main
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 information about the
course
 from me. Yours sincerely Nurbek
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Introduction/Conclusion Structure
To improve your score, consider adding a more structured introduction and conclusion to your essay. A clear introduction could briefly mention your recommendation and highlight the main points you will discuss, while the conclusion should summarize your advice succinctly.
Logical Structure
Enhance the logical structure of your essay by organizing your points more effectively. Use paragraphs to separate different ideas and ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main point. This will make your essay more coherent and easier to follow.
Task Achievement
Make sure your essay fully addresses the task by expanding on how the course specifically suits your friend's interests or career goals. Adding personal anecdotes or explaining why you think the course benefitted you could make your response more complete and persuasive.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prospective student
  • alma mater
  • curriculum
  • faculty
  • state-of-the-art
  • extramural
  • scholarly pursuits
  • cohort
  • accreditations
  • holistic development
  • pedagogy
  • thesis
  • dissertation
  • prerequisites
  • mentorship
  • application portal
  • tuition fees
  • scholarships
  • financial aid
  • internship opportunities
  • networking events
  • career services
  • personal statement
  • deadline
  • admissions office
  • recommendation letters
  • portfolio
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