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The maps below show a science park in the 2008 and the same park today.

The maps below show a science park in the 2008 and the same park today.
#maps #show #science #park
The
map
 illustrates the changes and developments in the science
park
 .The first picture shows the original blueprint of the
park
 in 2008 and the second picture displays the changes in the recent year. As seen from the
map
,new
infrastutures
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infrastructure
infrastructures
such
 as research and development were added at the northwest side and the station at the south of the
map
 as mentioned. The reception building was replaced by the University hub
while
 the business units remained the same.
Next,
the car
park
 was renovated
into
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 a smaller size compared to the past.
In contrast
,the cyber security building is upgarded into
a
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double
of
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it
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its
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 previous sizes.,The IT centre was replaced by
innovation
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the innovation
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 centre
at
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on
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 the
westsouth
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western
 side of the
map
 .
Finally
,
the
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transport networks are added
such
 as bus
stop
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stops
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,cycle
path
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paths
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 and railway
system
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systems
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.
Overall
,many new
contructions
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constructions
 are built in the science
park
 to help improve one's living.
However
,the natural
of
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flora and fauna have been destroyed in order to create a better living for the people.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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