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The table below shows the amount of waste production (in millions of tonnes) in six differerent countries over a twenty-year period.

The table below shows the amount of waste production (in millions of tonnes) in six differerent countries over a twenty-year period.
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The table above illustrates the number in millions of
tons
 of production wasted by 6 different countries over
20-year
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a 20-year
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 time frame. All in all, it is transparent that the
weight
 of wasted production in America was the highest in these countries,
while
 the
figure
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 in Ireland were the lowest. The
weight
 of wasted
manufactures
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manufacturers
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 witnessed a general incline throughout
20 years
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the 20-year
 period except
of
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in Korea. In 1980,
American
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generated the highest
weight
 of scraps, accounting for a whopping 131
million
tons
, more than 50 times as large as the number in Portugal.
In contrast
, the waste production in Ireland was the lowest, with the figure standing at only 0.6
million
tons
, almost
one seventh
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 the data in Poland (4
million
tons
). Diverting the data in 2000, there was a significant increase in the data in
US
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, which reached
to
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192
million
tons
,
although
 the number in Ireland
rise
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 only 4.4
million
tons
, the lowest
weight
 in
this
 year.
Additionally
, the figure in Poland and Portugal stood at around 5 to 7
million
tons
 as well.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tons, weight, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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