The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts compare the total expenses of a selected local
government
on several nine different aspects in 2010 and 2015. Generally, the local
government
reduced their expenditures on almost
aspects
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all aspects
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. Meanwhile, only only few of them
that
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either had a slight growth or
a
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the
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same proportion from
previous
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year.
Initially
, the local
government
allocated 24%
from
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their revenues for education purposes,
however
, it reduced to 21% a decade later. A similar trend
also
occurred in terms of defence matters, as the income
only
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designated for 14%
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at
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in
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the end of the period, from its initial 17%. Even though the expenses for healthcare provisions had a slight decrease by one
percent
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, it still became the second prioritized aspect in both years.
In contrast
, the apportion
to
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the cultural and recreational activities
as well as
transports, only reached 2% and 3%, respectively, at the beginning of the period and hit equally one
percent
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in the later year, which made them the smallest
spendings
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spending
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.
On the other hand
, interest in borrowing and welfare
were
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both obtained less budget from the local
government
for only less than ten
percent
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in 2010, which doubled ten years later to 10% and 13%, respectively. Meanwhile, the squanderings for pensions and other purposes were steady throughout the given period.
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