The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
The diagram illustrates the plan
how
the middle of Change preposition
for how
a
Islip will be renovated in the future.
Change the article
an
Overall
, the map below shows that the small town Islip
got Change preposition
of Islip
the
better infrastructure Correct article usage
a
in
after the renovation than now.
Before the development, there Change preposition
apply
was
only shops Correct subject-verb agreement
were
as well as
main
Correct article usage
a main
road
between countryside
and housing Correct article usage
the countryside
in
the northern side. Change preposition
on
Main
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The main
road
was connected to school
and park which are located Correct article usage
the school
in
the Change preposition
on
south western
side and Correct your spelling
southwestern
south eastern
side respectively. Correct your spelling
southeastern
Moreover
, there was any
direct way from school to park.
In the meanwhile, they planned to enlarge several facilities. The main Correct determiner usage
no
road
is replaced to
Change preposition
with
dual
carriageway which is larger than before. In the centre, Correct article usage
a dual
shop
is located in the middle of the carriageway, bus station, shopping centre, car park and new housing are added to the north of shops. Add an article
the shop
Also
, pedestrians only
Add a hyphen
pedestrians-only
road
are introduced between shopping Fix the agreement mistake
roads
centre
and shops. The map after the renovation shows that the small town become a Fix the agreement mistake
centres
well-equiped
city Correct your spelling
well-equipped
as well as
converting
Wrong verb form
converted
countryside
Correct article usage
the countryside
to
Change preposition
into
housing
area.Correct article usage
a housing
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