The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
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The diagram illustrates the plan
how
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for how
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the middle of
a
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an
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Islip will be renovated in the future.
Overall
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, the map below shows that the small town
Islip
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of Islip
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got
the
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a
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better infrastructure
in
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apply
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after the renovation than now. Before the development, there
was
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were
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only shops
as well as
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main
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a main
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road
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between
countryside
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the countryside
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and housing
in
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on
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the northern side.
Main
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The main
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road
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was connected to
school
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the school
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and park which are located
in
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on
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the
south western
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southwestern
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side and
south eastern
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southeastern
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side respectively.
Moreover
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, there was
any
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no
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direct way from school to park. In the meanwhile, they planned to enlarge several facilities. The main
road
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is replaced
to
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with
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dual
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a dual
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carriageway which is larger than before. In the centre,
shop
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the shop
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is located in the middle of the carriageway, bus station, shopping centre, car park and new housing are added to the north of shops.
Also
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,
pedestrians only
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pedestrians-only
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road
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roads
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are introduced between shopping
centre
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centres
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and shops. The map after the renovation shows that the small town become a
well-equiped
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well-equipped
city
as well as
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converting
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converted
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countryside
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the countryside
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to
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into
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housing
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a housing
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area.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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