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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday • describe some possible disadvantages •say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear John I am so glad to hear that you are going to go
for
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 a camping holiday in the summer
,
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and
also
 thank you for taking advice from me.I hope you spend
this
 summer with enjoyable memories I can say that you will quite wallow it.You should go
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camping because
i
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 had a great camping experience. One of the great opportunities
you can
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 take a long
walking
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 in the wilderness and green nature.You can
also
 go to a nearby lake for fishing or swimming which you have always
want
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 to do.But the best thing about
this
 camping holiday will be that it will actually improve your mood.
On the other hand
, the are some drawbacks,
such
 as bad weather and dealing with dangerous animals and harmful insects. To be
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 with you, if I have a chance
i
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 will go
to
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the
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camping with you, But
this
 summer
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 am going to
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London with my parents for their anniversary.I wish you
memorable
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 holiday Take care and stay fine. Your sincerity Akbarshoh
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task achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the prompt in a balanced manner. While your letter touches on all the suggested points, expanding on each point with more depth and examples could enhance your task response.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices (e.g., furthermore, however) to link ideas within and between paragraphs more smoothly. This will improve the flow of your letter and make your points clearer.
coherence cohesion
Try to maintain a clear paragraph structure with a distinct opening and closing sentence for each paragraph. This helps in presenting your ideas more coherently and makes your letter easier to follow.
coherence cohesion
Revise for minor grammatical errors and ensure that verb tenses are consistent throughout your letter. Paying attention to these details can improve the overall readability and professionalism of your writing.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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