The diagram below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The diagram below illustrates the life cycle of
salmon
which is a species of large fish
.
Overall
, there are
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is
a
one Correct article usage
apply
resourse
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resource
as
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apply
salmon
, 3 stages as
leaving the Change preposition
apply
eggs
, fast flowing to lower
river and going to Add an article
the lower
open
sea.
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the open
First
stage is Change the article
The first
a
leaving Correct article usage
apply
eggs
. The adult fish
leaves small stones and salmon
eggs
under the reeds, approxemently
for 5-6 months. After 5 Correct your spelling
approximately
month
the egg becomes a tiny Change to a plural noun
months
fish
, exactly a fry which is 3-8 cantimetres. Second
stage is a fast flowing, Change the article
The second
a
process of Correct article usage
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fry
, going to Wrong verb form
frying
lower
river for 4 years. There the little fry becomes smolt, which size is about 12-15 Add an article
the lower
cantimetres
.
The Correct your spelling
centimetres
last
stage of process
of growing Add an article
the process
salmon
is open
sea, which means smolt becomes an adult Add an article
the open
salmon
and fish's
size is 70-76 Correct article usage
the fish's
cantimetres
. They are already grown to go to Correct your spelling
centimetres
open
sea for 5 years and after Add an article
the open
that
they leave the Add a comma
that,
eggs
and continues
the life cycle Correct subject-verb agreement
continue
with
repeating itChange preposition
by
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, fish, eggs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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