The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. ummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

ummarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where revelant.
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The bar charts illustrate the usage of
the
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water
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in
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three different purposes namely domestic,industrial and agricultural in six different areas with instruments in percentages.
To begin
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with,there are six countries like
Afica
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Africa
,Central
Asia
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,South East
Asia
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,
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Europe
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and Europe
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and the
last
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one
are
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is
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south and
north
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America as mentioned above.Most of the countries use
water
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for agricultural purposes
such
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as Central
Asia
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with 88%,South East
Asia
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with 81% and
Afica
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Africa
with 84% and South
American71
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America71
% each.
In contrast
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,domestic and
idustrial
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industrial
have
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figures
no
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less than 7% .As seen from the charts,in North
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American
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America
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and
Europe
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,industrials consume more
water
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than
other
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others
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with
a
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figure
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figures
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48 and 53%.
Finally
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,both
Europe
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and North
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American
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America
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have the same trends of consuming
water
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in
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the
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domestic and agricultural purposes with no more than 40% and less than 12%.
Overall
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,most
water
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consume
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is consumed
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in the
arigricultural
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agricultural
developments
on
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in
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four areas
such
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as
Afica
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Africa
,Central
Asia
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, South East
Asia
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and South
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American
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America
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.
However
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, in North
American
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and
Europe
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countries,they are most
prefered
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preferred
to use
water
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on
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for
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the industrial
developments
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development
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, asia, europe, american with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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