The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

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The pie charts give information about the proportion of three different kinds of nutrients in ordinary meals, all of them could

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if used extremely.

Overall

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, it can be seen that all the mentioned nutrients could be found more in dinner, except for added

sugar

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In addition

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, breakfast contained a lower level of

Sodium

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, Saturated fat and Added

Sugar

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in it. Looking at the

detail

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details

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, by eating dinner about 43%

sodium

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entered our body,

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it just contained 23% added

sugar

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. By consuming Lunch we only

added

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approximately 29%

Sodium

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and 26% Saturated fat to our bodies and it

also

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contained

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contains

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just 19% Added

sugar

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. With respect to breakfast, it is

noticible

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noticeable

that the lower amounts of nutrients

allocated

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are allocated

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to it. The calculated

percentage

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percentages

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for

Sodium

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, Saturated fat and Added

sugar

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are 14, 16 and 16 per cent,

respectitively

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respectively

. Turning to snacks, they just include 14%

Sodium

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while

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a huge amount of added

sugar

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(42%)

found

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is found

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in them.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, sodium with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

157 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

nutrients
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carbohydrates
proteins
fats
percentages
typical meals
comparing
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dietary composition
dominant presence
balanced mix
heavier meals
potential concerns
dietary balance
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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

Some people believe that children should be given lessons on how to manage money in the school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from home.

Some people believe that success is about hard work and determination. Others think that success has a connection with money and personal appearance. Discuss both these views and give your opinion. (Steve no copyright)