The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

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The pie charts give information about the proportion of three different kinds of nutrients in ordinary meals, all of them could

harm

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be harmful

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if used extremely.

Overall

, it can be seen that all the mentioned nutrients could be found more in dinner, except for added

sugar

In addition

, breakfast contained a lower level of

Sodium

, Saturated fat and Added

Sugar

in it. Looking at the

detail

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details

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, by eating dinner about 43%

sodium

entered our body,

while

it just contained 23% added

sugar

. By consuming Lunch we only

added

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add

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approximately 29%

Sodium

and 26% Saturated fat to our bodies and it

also

contained

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contains

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just 19% Added

sugar

. With respect to breakfast, it is

noticible

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noticeable

that the lower amounts of nutrients

allocated

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are allocated

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to it. The calculated

percentage

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percentages

show examples

for

Sodium

, Saturated fat and Added

sugar

are 14, 16 and 16 per cent,

respectitively

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respectively

. Turning to snacks, they just include 14%

Sodium

while

a huge amount of added

sugar

(42%)

found

Add a missing verb

is found

show examples

in them.

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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
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9Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

157 words

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