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Today, in modern society, fast food is growing and playing an important role in daily life. Many people think it has many benefits, but other don’t agree. Let’s consider what are the advantages and disadvantages of convenience food.

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There has always been a debatable issue in our society pertaining to modern society fast
food
 is growing and playing an important role in daily
life
. Some consider that there are some benefits to
this
 tendency,
while
 others are sceptical about it and
they
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contemplate that it has more cons than pros. I am in complete agreement with the former standpoint and in the forthcoming paragraphs I shall explain my position.
Firstly
, there are some inevitable drawbacks that should be advocated and the most detrimental aspect of fast
food
 is growing and playing
in
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an
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 important role in daily
life
 is that fast
food
 can very bad impact on health. Because fast
food
 is unnecessary for the stomach.
Moreover
, it is
also
 deemed that junk
food
 meals
for
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are for
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 all humans. if you every day eat fast
food
first
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every first
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 of all spend more money and lose health during your
life
.
For example
 different kinds of fast
food
 pizza, tomato-free, sandwiches by the way following foods really bad.
While
 there are unambiguous disadvantages like the one mentioned above, benefits are
also
 a great deal
firstly
 it can be stated that fast
food
 is made swiftly and there
is
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 enough comfortable locations for eating fast
food
.
Besides
 it can
also
 acknowledged that
,
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 fast
food
 is very comfortable for eating with family or friends because inside fast
food
 has
good
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a good
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 special packet.
For example
, restaurant chefs can hank easily and fast. In conclusion, there are some obvious disadvantageous points of in modern society fast
food
 is growing and playing an important role in daily
life
,
however
 as every coin has two sides, there are more than a few benefits of
this
,
such
 as fast
food
 made a swiftly and there are different kind of location for the customer. these completely outweigh its demerits
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structure
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Express your position on the topic clearly at the beginning and reiterate it in the conclusion.
cohesion
Organize your essay logically by clearly separating it into paragraphs, each focusing on a particular point. Use linking words to connect ideas and paragraphs.
support
Support your main points with specific examples or explanations. This strengthens your argument and makes it more convincing.
task response
In terms of task response, make sure to address the prompt fully. Discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of fast food as the question requires. Provide specific examples to illustrate your points.
accuracy
Work on improving the grammatical accuracy and range in your writing. Frequent errors and limited vocabulary can hinder clarity and make your essay less persuasive.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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