Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with a friend. He/She has just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● thank him/her for the photos and for the holiday ● explain why you didn’t write earlier ● invite them to come and stay with you.

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Dear Jay, Hope you are doing well. It was a great
time
spending
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with you for the holiday. I am writing
this
letter
for thanking
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you, that you have captured those memories into a picture and letting me have an
accomodation
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accommodation
at your place. Let me tell you in detail. It was a good
time
as we had fun and stayed together after so long.
Nevertheless
, after getting our field jobs it was difficult to spare
a
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time
and get some break,
specially
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in my case. After making all the arrangements,
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I
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it
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was grateful that you allowed me to stay over there with you. After
spending
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having
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a great
time
, when
i
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I
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came back to my home,
i
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I
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was totally tired for a couple of days and had spent
my
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most
time
in
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sleeping and because of
it
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it,
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i
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I
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got late to
mail
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you. It would be great, if you
come
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here and
give
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me an opportunity to present my hospitality skills
with
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to
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you. After
all
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all,
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you have never visited my city.
In
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the upcoming festival,
i
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I
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think you should come here so that we can celebrate it together and
also
i
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will show you my new
appartment
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apartment
. Thanks for your consideration. Yours Faithful Jay Chawla
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Task Response
To improve your score in the task response category, make sure to directly address all parts of the prompt. Ensure that your letter is structured in a way that each section (thanking for the photos and holiday, explaining why you didn't write earlier, and the invitation) is distinctly tackled. While you've covered these points, elaborating a bit more on specific memories shared during the stay could make your response more complete.
Coherence and Cohesion
Regarding coherence and cohesion, strive for a more coherent flow of ideas by enhancing transitions between paragraphs. Aim for smoother transitions that naturally lead the reader from one idea to the next. This will significantly boost the logical structure of your letter. Additionally, try to start and close your letter in a more conventional or expected manner for this type of correspondence, which will improve your score in greeting and closing.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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