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You are planning a week-long vacation and you need someone to take care of your house while you are away. Write a letter to your neighbor and tell them that you are going away. In your letter, you should: - ask them to take care of your house; - explain why you will be away.

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Dear Mr Mehta, I am writing
this
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 letter in order to request
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help from you. As the festive season
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on-going
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 and
therfore
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therefore
i
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 got a vacation from my job. I have decided to visit my village by
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time
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. It would be great if you
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 look after my house, by the
time
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i
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 am away. It would be much appreciated if you
agree
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 on
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. Let me elaborate in detail. It's been almost a couple of
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i
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 haven'
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 visited my village.
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,
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 think that
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 is the best
time
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 for me to go there and spend
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 with my family. It would be helpful if you take care of my
accomodation
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accommodation
 till
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 return. I just live
to
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next door, and
fortunately
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fortunately,
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 there is no barrier wall which
seperate
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separate
 our
accomodation
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accommodation
 from each other, so you don'
t
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 even have to move far away to take care.
It
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 would be grateful if you agreed on
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 matter. I have turned off the whole meter of my house, and in order to get access to it, the box is just on
right
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 to the entry gate. I have
made
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 all the necessary precautions, so you don'
t
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 have to worry a lot. If you want, you can stay
in
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 my house or do your own chores
overthere
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over there
, it won'
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any
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 issue
to
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 me. Thanks for your consideration. Yours
Sincererly
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Sincerely
 Jay Chawla

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Task Achievement
Ensure clarity and precision in your request by directly stating what actions you wish your neighbor to take in looking after your house. Examples could include watering plants, checking mail, or ensuring security.
Task Achievement
Work on developing a more formal and polite tone throughout your letter. Phrases such as 'I am writing to request your help' and using 'would' instead of 'will' can make your request sound more polite and respectful.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance the logical structure by organizing your letter into clear paragraphs with distinct purposes. Starting with an introductory paragraph, followed by the main body explaining your absence and ending with a concluding paragraph that summarizes your requests and expresses gratitude.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve paragraph cohesion by linking ideas more smoothly and using a variety of linking words. You can also use pronouns effectively to refer back to previously mentioned ideas, making the text flow better.
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