The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.

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The pie charts compare the percentage of British university students who were able to speak a foreign
language
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in 2000 and 2010.
To begin
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with, the percentage of those who spoke Spanish increased
during
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the years,
whereas
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the popularity
for
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French decreased.
Moreover
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, the proportion of students who did not know another
language
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, apart from their native one, declined,
respresenting
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representing
the growing interest of students
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other languages
during
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over
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the years.
To begin
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, 35% of individuals could communicate in Spanish in 2010, compared to 2000, at 30%, representing the highest
precentage
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percentage
in the charts. Following that, the proportion for those who could interact in another
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had increased
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15% (2000) to 20% (2010).
On the other hand
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, the proportion
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French speakers had dropped from 15% to 10% by 2010,
as well as
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for those who only used their own
language
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from 20% to 10% in the same years.
Additionally
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, the statistics were unchanged for the learners who could
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talk
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in German and two other languages, at 10% in 2000 and 2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • proficiency
  • linguistic diversity
  • polyglot
  • language acquisition
  • second language (L2)
  • foreign language
  • fluency
  • working knowledge
  • mother tongue
  • language competence
  • language decline
  • cultural exchange
  • global language
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