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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The provided bar chart depicts the total
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
electricity
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 in ten major
countries
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in
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on
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 three different continents throughout the year 2014. These figures are measured in billion
kWh
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.
Overall
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, China was the highest producer and consumer
while
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 Korea was the least among all those
countries
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.
However
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,
electricity
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consumption
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 in Germany outnumbered its
production
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.
To begin
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 with, China took the lead as the biggest producer among all
countries
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, the supply of
electricity
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 stood at 5.398
kWh
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while
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 the demand was at 5.322
kWh
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.
On the other hand
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, the US took the second chart, by producing 4.099
kWh
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 and consuming 3.866
kWh
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. For other
countries
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, their
production
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 and
consumption
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 were under a thousand
kWh
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 and followed the same pattern
with
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 the top two
countries
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, where
production
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 is higher than
consumption
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.
Conversely
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, only Germany produced less
electricity
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 than
its
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 consumed.
Subsequently
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, Korea’s
electricity
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production
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 and
consumption
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 were on the
last
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 chart, being ten-fold lower than China’s.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, electricity, countries, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual aspect
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • industrial base
  • population size
  • significant difference
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • electrical energy
  • ranking
  • economic patterns
  • industrial patterns
  • technological advancements
  • disparity
  • industrial development
  • economic capabilities
  • anomalies
  • export
  • import
  • energy efficiency
  • waste
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