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Topic: Renewable Energy Sources: Advantages and Disadvantages

#topic #energy #sources
Nowadays,
energy
sources
has
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 become a topic of discussion
due to
 high inflation on the price of fuels and other
energies
. People are switching their choices to renewable
energies
 from non-renewable
energies
;
Therefore
, it has become imperative to scrutinize
benefits
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the benefits
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 and drawbacks of
the
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renewable
energies
.
This
 essay will discuss both in detail.
To begin
, the first and major advantage of regeneratable
energy
 is the availability of
sources
. The sun, sea and wind are the prime
source
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sources
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for
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the
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recycled
energies
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energy
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, and these are easily available in
surroundings
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the surroundings
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.
Moreover
,
due to
 its easy
excess
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 it is way cheaper than the other fuels.
For example
, Electricity
by
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 solar panels is quite
lesser
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less
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 than the regular
one
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ones
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.
Nevertheless
, it
also
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 beneficial for the environment. To exemplify, Recent research from India stated that the car running by solar
energy
 helps to reduce air pollution caused by petrol by 45%.
Additionally
, Natural
energies
also
 have some health-related merits, as
it
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reduces
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 the risk of respiratory diseases by reducing pollution caused by
the
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petroleum
smokes
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.
On the other hand
, natural
energy
sources
also
 have some pitfalls like
less
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 accurate than other gadgets, devices or cars.
Also
,
few
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 times it becomes difficult to rely on
the
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natural
sources
 as they are unpredictable in nature.
For Instance
, the machines operated by solar systems
works
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 perfectly in the day but it shows cases some glitches in the night.
As well as
, in some cases it can be expensive to invest in
the
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solar panels and other
energy storing
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energy-storing
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 equipment.
To conclude
,
although
 Reproducible
energies
 have some negative aspects it
also
 carries numerous benefits in financial, medical and physical aspects.
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structure
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linking
Use a wider range of linking words to improve the flow of your essay and make the relationship between sentences and paragraphs clearer. For example, besides 'Therefore,' and 'Nevertheless,' consider 'Furthermore,' 'In contrast,' or 'As a result.'
support
To strengthen your task achievement, try to provide more specific examples and evidence to support your points. This will make your argument more convincing.
accuracy
Pay attention to consistent spelling of key terms throughout your essay (e.g., 'renewable' vs. 'regeneratable' or 'reproducible energies'). Mistakes in key terms can distract from your argument.
balance
Deepen your analysis of the disadvantages of renewable energies. Consider exploring economic, technological, or infrastructural challenges in greater detail to present a more balanced discussion.
variety
Be cautious of repetitive phrases and try to vary your language to keep the essay engaging. Using synonyms and varied sentence structures can make your writing more interesting to read.

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