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Topic: Renewable Energy Sources: Advantages and Disadvantages

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Nowadays,
energy
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sources
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has
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 become a topic of discussion
due to
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 high inflation on the price of fuels and other
energies
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. People are switching their choices to renewable
energies
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 from non-renewable
energies
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;
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, it has become imperative to scrutinize
benefits
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the benefits
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 and drawbacks of
the
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renewable
energies
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both in detail.
To begin
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, the first and major advantage of regeneratable
energy
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 is the availability of
sources
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. The sun, sea and wind are the prime
source
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for
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the
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apply
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recycled
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energies
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energy
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, and these are easily available in
surroundings
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the surroundings
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.
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,
due to
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 its easy
excess
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 it is way cheaper than the other fuels.
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, Electricity
by
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from
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 solar panels is quite
lesser
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less
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 than the regular
one
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ones
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.
Nevertheless
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, it
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also
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is also
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 beneficial for the environment. To exemplify, Recent research from India stated that the car running by solar
energy
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 helps to reduce air pollution caused by petrol by 45%.
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, Natural
energies
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also
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 have some health-related merits, as
it
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reduces
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reduce
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 the risk of respiratory diseases by reducing pollution caused by
the
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apply
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petroleum
smokes
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smoke
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.
On the other hand
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, natural
energy
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sources
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also
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 have some pitfalls like
less
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 accurate than other gadgets, devices or cars.
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,
few
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a few
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 times it becomes difficult to rely on
the
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natural
sources
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 as they are unpredictable in nature.
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, the machines operated by solar systems
works
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 perfectly in the day but it shows cases some glitches in the night.
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, in some cases it can be expensive to invest in
the
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solar panels and other
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energy storing
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energy-storing
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 equipment.
To conclude
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,
although
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 Reproducible
energies
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 have some negative aspects it
also
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 carries numerous benefits in financial, medical and physical aspects.
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structure
Ensure the essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. The body paragraphs should each focus on a separate main idea, introduced with a topic sentence.
linking
Use a wider range of linking words to improve the flow of your essay and make the relationship between sentences and paragraphs clearer. For example, besides 'Therefore,' and 'Nevertheless,' consider 'Furthermore,' 'In contrast,' or 'As a result.'
support
To strengthen your task achievement, try to provide more specific examples and evidence to support your points. This will make your argument more convincing.
accuracy
Pay attention to consistent spelling of key terms throughout your essay (e.g., 'renewable' vs. 'regeneratable' or 'reproducible energies'). Mistakes in key terms can distract from your argument.
balance
Deepen your analysis of the disadvantages of renewable energies. Consider exploring economic, technological, or infrastructural challenges in greater detail to present a more balanced discussion.
variety
Be cautious of repetitive phrases and try to vary your language to keep the essay engaging. Using synonyms and varied sentence structures can make your writing more interesting to read.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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