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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph represents the
number
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 of
travelers
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travellers
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came
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who came
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 from outside countries to a specific nation in Europe from 1987 to 2007.
Overall
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 the
number
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 of total visitors in each
category
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 showed an increase during the given period, and the maximum numbers
was
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were
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 in 2002 with the lakes and 2007 with the coast. Despite the mountains
increased
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increasing
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 steadily throughout the whole period, the other two categories showed both upward and downward trends. The most
fluctuated
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fluctuating
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category
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 was the lakes. There were two main trends in the
number
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 of lake visitors, it increased from 10
thousand
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 to around 75
thousand
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, which was the
higest
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highest
number
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 in that year.
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this
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 rise, it showed a decrease from that
number
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 to 50
thousand
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, between 1987 and 2002, respectively. The coast received the highest
number
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 of tourists in 1987 with 40
thousands
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thousand
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 and showed a little decrease in 1992. After 1992,
this
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category
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 showed a climb with no fluctuations in it. After the coasts being the highest
number
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 in 2022,
this
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category
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 became the top with approximately 75
thousand
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 in the final year. Visitors
went
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who went
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 to the areas with mountains increased steadily from 20
thousand
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 to approximately 35
thousand
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 and there were no downward trends in any year in
this
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category
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, category, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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