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Some people believe that education trip or excursion helps promote overall holistic learning. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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 learning is transforming among scholars.
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, some individuals claim that educational
trip
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trips
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 and
workshop
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workshops
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 should be organised by
school
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schools
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, which can be beneficial for the
overall
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 development of students. I agree with
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 notion and
reasons
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 associated with
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 are elucidated in
following
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 paragraphs. Initiating with the best possible points, the first and foremost aspect is that visiting educational tours
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gallries
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galleries
 and historical buildings can provide
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practical knowledge, which stays
long
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 period in one's mind rather than theory.
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,
provision
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 of new locations
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 travelling
distinct
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 geographical parts might enhance enthusiasm and
inquistion
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inquisition
 between pupils to
dicover
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discover
 different places. In Japan,
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, the Times of Japan newspaper published the majority of learners accumulate 90%
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 appearing for final
examination
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examinations
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,
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 practical knowledge, which they attained during workshops and tours.
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, participating in informative trips can prove an excellent way to overcome from monotonous curriculum system, as exposure to
variety
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 of sites can lead to
rejuvenate
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learners
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learners'
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 mental
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while
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trip
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the trip
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,
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, students will start feeling comfortable in groups. Socialization may infuse a sense of contentment, which will allow them to become familiar with each other. To illustrate
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, a survey conducted by the "University of Waterloo" states that public trips foster ample skills in terms of working in a team, group leader, sharing and many more, which enable students to settle in any type of workplace in future.
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, joining excursions
faciliate
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facilitates
 individuals in several ways, as
this
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 tendency offers them to get visualization and learn about different places.
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this
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,
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mind
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minds
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 and social skills
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 help scholars to escape from boring study life.

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