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Writing Samples
Band 5

You recently went on holiday and your friend lent you a travel guidebook. Write a letter to friend. In your letter tell your friend about the holiday explain how the guidebook was helpful say when and how you will return the guidebook

Dear Paul, Hope you are doing well. I reached
from
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Niagara
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in
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last
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 Sunday. It was so
amazing
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 trip and your guide
help
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 me very much. Our first wedding anniversary was on
the Saturday
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Saturday
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.
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, we planned a small trip to
Niagara
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. The
Niagara
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 Falls is
the
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one of the main attractions in
this
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 journey. I booked a hotel room which
is facing
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 to Falls. So, we can enjoy our night with the beauty of
Falls
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the Falls
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. Your travel guidebook
was help
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 me very lot.
First
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 time we
are
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 confused about the parking lot. They paying
huge
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 price for parking. At that time, I remembered about your book. From
that
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 we got information
of
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cheep
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 parking areas over
Niagara
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 and some
money saving
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 tips. I bought something for you from there. Shall we meet
on
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 our favourite coffee shop on Wednesday evening? I will return back the guidebook and gifts to you at that time. See you soon. Loving,
Fency
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Fancy
 Stanly

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Coherence and Cohesion
Begin by focusing on developing a clear structure for your letter. This includes a proper introduction, body paragraphs each dedicated to a point you need to address such as details about the holiday, how the guidebook helped, and arranging the return of the guidebook, followed by a suitable conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on linking your ideas more fluidly. Transition words and phrases such as 'firstly,' 'furthermore,' and 'consequently' can help the reader follow your narrative more comfortably. This will enhance the logical flow of your letter.
Task Achievement
Ensure to directly address all parts of the task. Each point in the prompt - discussing your holiday, explaining the guidebook's usefulness, and detailing the return of the guidebook - should be clearly and fully explored for a higher score.
Task Achievement
Try using a variety of sentence structures and vocabulary to convey your messages. This not only makes your writing more interesting but also demonstrates your proficiency in the language.
General Advice
Be mindful of grammatical errors and aim to correct these in future writings. Errors can distract from your message and affect the reader's understanding.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gratitude
  • Breathtaking
  • Insights
  • Invaluable
  • Local cuisine
  • Navigating
  • Off-the-beaten-path
  • Anecdotes
  • Well-preserved
  • Reconnect
  • Safeguarded
  • Courier
  • Itinerary
  • Landmarks
  • Cultural gems
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