IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012 You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012 You should write at least 150 words.
#minutes #line #changes #amount #coffee #three #countries
The line chart compares the
coffee
 export from three nations in South America measured in
million
kilograms
 over 10
years
Correct your spelling
10-year
 period from 2002 to 2012. In summary,
coffee
 sales in every
countries
Change to a singular noun
country
show examples
 in South America have boosted from
starting
Correct article usage
the starting
show examples
 points of the time presented in
chart
Add an article
the chart
a chart
show examples
. Brazil has stable growth
however
, Colombia and Costa Rica have
flutuactive
Correct article usage
a flutuactive
show examples
 trend but
at the
end
Add a comma
end,
show examples
 they have
surge
Correct article usage
a surge
show examples
 the production compared
at
Change preposition
to
show examples
 the beginning of the time presented in
graph
Add an article
the graph
a graph
show examples
. Looking in more detail, in 2002 Brazil exported approximately 12
million
kilograms
 of
coffee
 and steadily
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
show examples
 to 25
million
kilogram
Change to a plural noun
kilograms
show examples
 in 2012.
On the other hand
, for Costa
Rica
Add a comma
Rica,
show examples
 the
coffee
 export
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
dropped to 7
million
kilograms
 between 2002 and 2006. After that, Costa Rica has progressively
rise
Change the verb form
risen
show examples
 to 20
million
kilograms
 in 2012.
Lastly
, Columbia has
trade
Wrong verb form
traded
show examples
 overseas 12
million
kilograms
 in 2006,
nevertheless
, it
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
dropped significantly by around 3
million
kilograms
 in 2008.
Although
Correct word choice
However
show examples
, the trade
is
Verb problem
apply
show examples
gradually
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
show examples
 to 15
million
kilograms
 in 2012.
Submitted by hafidhfikri.rasyid on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, million, kilograms with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: