Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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some countries which
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specialised facilities to
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top
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it is great. Because only by
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method of building perfect training camps ,
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section. But at the same
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we can see that in some situations
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from
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. The president of
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, Ramzan
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makes big donations and supporting to
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his country. But we can see that
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the amateur
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level of
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just downgrading
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every year in
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order to
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in
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. Like if you want to go to
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martial arts, or just go to
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centre , you might
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wait half of the year, only in best case scenario. The best idea to improve it ,
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equal
support
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and
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for each
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train
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, for amateurs and
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to
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professional
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athletes
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. But let's be honest. For each country to
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top
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, it's just more profitable , than to
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amateurs in
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. So
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guess it is
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development, because you can leave a legacy in the whole world,
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of supporting
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support
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amateurs.
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has so many
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athletes
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,which
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make
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more popular
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the
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all
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world, for the next 30 years , in my opinion. But ,in
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case , the amateur part of the
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will suffer greatly.
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Structure
Focus on clearly introducing your topic and stating your opinion in the introduction. This sets the stage for your argument.
Structure
Ensure the conclusion summarises your arguments effectively and restates your opinion, reinforcing the message of your essay.
Logical Flow
Develop a clear logical structure for your essay. Organise your ideas into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific point or example.
Cohesion
Connect your ideas using appropriate linking words to improve the flow of your essay. This helps in maintaining the reader's interest and understanding.
Task Response
Address both views of the topic as mentioned in the prompt. Discuss the positives and negatives before stating your opinion to fully respond to the task.
Examples and Support
Use specific examples to support your points. While you've provided an example of Chechnya, a more balanced approach covering both positive and negative aspects in more depth would strengthen your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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