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the charts give information about two genres of TV programes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia

the charts give information about two genres of TV programes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia
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The bar charts illustrate the information about two genres of TV
programes
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programmes
programs
 watched by men and
woman
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women
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 and four different
age
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groups
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 in
australia
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Australia
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 with
both
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 instruments in percentages.The first bar chart
dispaly
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display
displays
the
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apply
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information
of
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about
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 people
watched
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who watched
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 reality shows and the second shows
the
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apply
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information
of
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about
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 people
watched
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who watched
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 game shows. As seen from the charts,
female
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females
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 watched a lot of reality shows compared to men with
a
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figures
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figures
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 of 70%
while
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 men with
a rates
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a rate
rates
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 of 38%.In
contract
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contrast
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,females have
less
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lower
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 percentages on game shows with
a
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figures
a figure
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figures
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 of 60% and
mens
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men
 with a 62%
rates
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rate
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.Next,
age
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groups
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 with more than 45 years old have similar trends on
both
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 TV
programes
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programmes
programs
 with
a
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figures
a figure
show examples
figures
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 not less than 65%.Other
age
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groups
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 from 25 to 44 years old on reality programmes have more percentages compared to people who are watched game shows with
a
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a figure
figures
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figures
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50
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of 50
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%,68%,38% and 40%,respectively.
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,
age
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groups
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 from 16 to 24 years old
both
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 have
same
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the same
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 rates with a 50% each.
Overall
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,
both
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 programmes have enough audience to watch their shows with no less than 30% each.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups, both, figures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • viewership trends
  • genre
  • comparative analysis
  • distribution
  • notable deviations
  • cultural influences
  • societal factors
  • predictive trends
  • viewing preferences
  • target audience
  • popularity metrics
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