The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
There are 2 data points below that illustrate
income
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the income
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and outcome of the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of the UK.  
Overall
, we can notice that
spendings
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spending
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similar to
budget
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the budget
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have been
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increased. And the majority of income and outcome take national government and salaries for officers, respectively.
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, in 2017, the national government allocated more than half the money,
while
income from other sources
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only 38 million (which is just more than 10
percent
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per cent
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).
Furthermore
, the total amount of money in 2017 and 2018 did not change much; the difference was about 5
percent
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per cent
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.   The pie chart
also
suggests that the percentage of building and transport money did not change at all. And the biggest difference from 2017 was investment in the technology sphere.
Because in
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2017 it was only 8 percent, but in 2018 it has
been
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changed
for
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almost twice.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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