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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
Professionals
 as
doctors
 and
engineers
crucial
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are crucial
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 for our society.
Development
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The development
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 of
country
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the country
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 depends on
professionals
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the professionals
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 of the
country
. But,want
professionals
work
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to work
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 in their own
country
 or
they
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do they
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 want to be free to
work
 in another
country
?
Doctors
 who have completed their training in their native
country
 should remain there to provide healthcare and save lives.
Similarly
,
engineers
 play a vital role in constructing essential infrastructure to accommodate the growing population. As the global population continues to increase, the demand for housing and other amenities
also
 rises, highlighting the importance of skilled
professionals
 staying in their own countries to contribute to their development.
On the other hand
, everyone has the freedom and
rights
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right
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 to choose their career path, including
doctors
 and
engineers
. It is their prerogative to decide whether to
work
 in their home
country
 or abroad. Working overseas offers various benefits,
such
 as gaining extensive experience with a wide range of diseases for
doctors
 and participating in groundbreaking architectural projects for
engineers
.
Additionally
, working on projects abroad can broaden one's horizons and contribute positively to mental health and
overall
 well-being. Considering everything and every opinion,
i
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I
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 will stay with
opinion
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the opinion
an opinion
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 that
doctors
 and
engineers
 should stay in their homeland and
work
 for their native
country
 to develop their society.
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Task achievement can be enhanced by fully answering the question. This includes discussing both views comprehensively and providing specific examples to support your points. Additionally, clearly stating your opinion and reasoning will help clarify your stance.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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