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The Table Below Shows the Results of Surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 About One University.

The Table Below Shows the Results of Surveys in 2000, 2005 and 2010 About One University.
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The table illustrates the results of surveys in 2000,2005 and 2010 about One University in five different aspects with instruments in percentages.There are five aspects displayed above namely technical quality ,print
resources
, electronic
resources
,range of modules offered and teaching facilities. As seen from the table , in 2000, the students at the One University had
gave
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given
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 a good rate on the print
resources
 with a figure of 87% and slowly increased to 89% after 5 years but had dropped to 88% in 2010.
For teaching
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 facilities had a similar trend for the past 10 years with a number of 77%.
Next,
students
seen
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were seen
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 to
gave
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give
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a low rating rates
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a low rating rate
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 on the range of modules offered with not more than 32% each.
Finally
, the technical quality and the electronic
resources
 had
a opposite rating rates
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an opposite rating rate
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 for every
5 years
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5-year
 gap and ended at 69% and 88% each ,respectively.
Overall
, the print
recources
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resources
 and the electronic
resources
have
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had
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 the same rates in 2010 which are
the
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apply
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higher among others.
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