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The charts show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010. In the pie charts, there were four majors given in those years: Computer science, Medicine, Business, and Law.

The charts show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010. In the pie charts, there were four majors given in those years: Computer science, Medicine, Business, and Law.
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The pie charts below illustrate the different major degrees obtained at the National University for four different topics of Computer Science, Business, Medicine, and Law in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010 by students.
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, it is noticeable that the Computer Science program
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 was the same as the Business program in 1990 with 30% of the whole.
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, in the next two remaining years, Computer Science surpassed and became the most popular program, with the highest
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 of 45
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 in the year 2010.
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, 25% of all students
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studied Medicine in 1990,
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,
this
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 had increased and reached 30% of all, but
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 did not remain the same and dropped to 25
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 again in 2010.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • degrees granted
  • majors
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable trends
  • technological advancements
  • job market demand
  • healthcare policies
  • research breakthroughs
  • economic cycles
  • globalization
  • entrepreneurship trends
  • legislation
  • societal issues
  • international policies
  • academic and professional interests
  • implications
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