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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summariset h e information by selecting andreporting the main features, and make comparisons whererelevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summariset h e information by selecting andreporting the main features, and make comparisons whererelevant.
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The provided bar chart compares the
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 of mobile calls in the UK that had 3 different types,
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 as local, national, international and mobile calls from 1995 to 2002.
It is clear that
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 local calls were in the leading position in the
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 of
minutes
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while
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 mobile calls took the smallest quantity of
minutes
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 over the period. As it stands out from the bar chart, local calls had their record (90
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minutes
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) in 1999 before a steady decrease from 1999 to 2002.
As a result
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, these types of calls
at the end
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 of the period reached exactly the same
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 of
minutes
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 as at the beginning. National and international calls had
slow
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 increase over the period with approximately 35
billion
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minutes
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 in 1995 and 60
minutes
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 in 2002, which means that it jumped roughly twice. Mobile calls were in the
last
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 place among others not only in the beginning but
also
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 in the end. Mobile calls formed an insignificant
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 of
minutes
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 (nearly 2) in 1995, after that, these types of calls grew slowly until 1999 with a little bit higher than 10
billion
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minutes
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,
however
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, had a noticeable jump by approximately a third
billion
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minutes
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 from 1999 to 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, minutes, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "jumped" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slow" was used 2 times.
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