Letter You have just started a course in college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private clubs in your letter. Interduce yourself Say why you are interested in this sports club Ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, memubers, cost.
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Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing to ask for information about a
sport
club which is around the college.
My name is Oqila. I have been studying a course in a college for a week and I found out that there is no fitness club available.
I Change the noun form
sports
am
interested in volleyball since I was a kid. It was my favourite thing for fifteen years Wrong verb form
have been
that is
why I am asking you about somewhere I can play with people who have a same interest as me.
I have read your advertisement of
the volleyball course and would like to know more about it.
Change preposition
for
Firstly
, I would like to know where it is and what price
is. I would be grateful if you could tell me about members and other things which are included in Correct article usage
the price
club
.
I would like to receive Add an article
the club
as
soon as possible but not later a week before the holiday. Because I want to get back to my slim body Correct pronoun usage
it as
and
practicing with Correct word choice
apply
tutor
would help me with it.
You can contact me on my mobile phone number which is +998990463414 or send the above-mentioned information to my email.
Yours faithfully.
OqilaAdd an article
a tutor
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logical structure
Ensure that each paragraph introduces a clear topic at the beginning and sticks to it throughout, making the structure of your letter more logical and easier to follow.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are appropriately formal, maintaining a polite tone suitable for writing to a manager. However, make sure to consistently use the formal title (either 'Sir' or 'Madam') or consider using 'To whom it may concern' if gender is unknown.
single idea per paragraph
Avoid mixing several ideas within a single paragraph. Keep your paragraphs focused on a single topic to enhance readability and cohesion.
complete response
While you have addressed the tasks by introducing yourself and expressing interest in the sports club, elaborating more on specific questions about the facilities and providing clearer, more direct queries would enhance your response.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a consistently formal tone throughout your letter. Avoid using colloquial expressions and ensure your writing is respectful and professional. Your writing mostly meets this criterion, but watch out for informal phrasing or slang.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.