It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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a significant role in the
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paramount duty of
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youngsters about the difference between good and bad behaviour. Some people believe that any form of
punishment
is a part of learning,
while
many vehemently oppose
this
idea. I disagree with
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punishment
such
as physical
abuse
is the only solution to make them learn the distinction between right and wrong.
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on both sides of the
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and will
also
discuss the repercussions of
punishment
. On the one hand, some people consider any form of strict
punishment
such
as physical and mental
abuse
an important part of learning in a
child
's
life
.
Nevertheless
, a
child
has a weak mind and he needs the guidance of elders who can teach him the difference between the good and bad.
However
, any physical and mental trauma can affect him deeply which
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to a significant impact on the later
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stages
of
life
. No doubt, those
children
who have suffered any sort of
abuse
have low
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and low
self confidence
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. It is important for
parents
to use effective
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methods
for bringing positivity
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the
child
's mind.
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,
children
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low
self esteem
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after
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receiving
any sort of physical and mental
abuse
.
For instance
,
children
who suffer from any childhood trauma can lose their
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and can suffer from depression in later stages of
life
.
Secondly
,
parents
should behave in a good manner to set a good example for their
children
. It is scientifically proven that teenagers copy the behaviour of their role models. In conclusion, I believe that parental figures should motivate positivity in adolescents to encourage good behaviour in them. Teachers and
parents
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to
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moral and ethical values in the mind of
younger
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generation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Moral development
  • Positive reinforcement
  • Negative reinforcement
  • Behavioral psychology
  • Disciplinary methods
  • Corporal punishment
  • Psychological effects
  • Authoritative parenting
  • Permissive parenting
  • Behavioural correction
  • Ethical considerations
  • Legal frameworks
  • Cognitive development
  • Social norms
  • Character building
  • Restorative practices
  • Authoritarian approach
  • Constructive criticism
  • Pro-social behavior
  • Conditioning
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