The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

You should write at least 150 words.
The provided table shows
that
Correct word choice
apply
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the
time
range of unemployed people by 14 sorts (
housework
, shopping, job hunting, visiting friends or relatives, gardening,
TV
, reading, decorating, walking, nothing/sitting around, staying in bed, visiting town, playing
sport
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a sport
the sport
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, drinking) of activities in the
last
year in
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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. The information is measured by not only gender but
also
morning and afternoon.
Overall
, in the morning, numerous of
man
hunts
Correct subject-verb agreement
hunt
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job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
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,
do
Correct word choice
and do
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housework
,
whereas
half of
women
do
housework
and go shopping
while
they
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they are
they were
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jobless. In the afternoon,
man
watches
TV
or garden, despite
women
do
Wrong verb form
doing
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housework
or
visit
Wrong verb form
visiting
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friends and
realities
Correct your spelling
relatives
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.
According
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According to
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this
table, unemployed
Britisher
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Britishers
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hang out their spare
time
for
housework
, gardening, shopping and job hunting when they are
in
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apply
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inactive. The lowest spending morning
time
could be seen in
category
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the category
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of drinking, nothing/ sitting around and
TV
in all genders.
Female
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Females
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, spending
time
of
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on
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housework
accounted
dramatically
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for dramatically
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greater than
Add an article
the male
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male
Fix the agreement mistake
males
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which
are
Change the verb form
is
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19% and 49% respectively, despite
man
Fix the agreement mistake
men
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spend
Wrong verb form
spending
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time
of
Change preposition
on
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gardening
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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at 14% which is more than
women
(2%).
On the other hand
,
lowest
Correct article usage
the lowest
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afternoon
time
was staying in bed, visiting town, playing
sport
Fix the agreement mistake
sports
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and drinking which accounted for under 5% in both genders.
Man
jobless person watch
TV
most at just 14%, even though
women
do
housework
highest 21%)
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, housework, tv, man, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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