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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided table shows
that
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apply
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the
time
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 range of unemployed people by 14 sorts (
housework
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, shopping, job hunting, visiting friends or relatives, gardening,
TV
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, reading, decorating, walking, nothing/sitting around, staying in bed, visiting town, playing
sport
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a sport
the sport
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, drinking) of activities in the
last
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 year in
UK
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the UK
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. The information is measured by not only gender but
also
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 morning and afternoon.
Overall
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, in the morning, numerous of
man
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hunts
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hunt
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job
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jobs
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,
do
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and do
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housework
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,
whereas
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 half of
women
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 do
housework
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 and go shopping
while
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they
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they are
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 jobless. In the afternoon,
man
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 watches
TV
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 or garden, despite
women
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do
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doing
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housework
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 or
visit
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visiting
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 friends and
realities
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relatives
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.
According
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According to
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this
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 table, unemployed
Britisher
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Britishers
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 hang out their spare
time
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 for
housework
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, gardening, shopping and job hunting when they are
in
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apply
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inactive. The lowest spending morning
time
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 could be seen in
category
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the category
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 of drinking, nothing/ sitting around and
TV
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 in all genders.
Female
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Females
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, spending
time
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of
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on
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housework
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 accounted
dramatically
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for dramatically
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 greater than
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the male
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male
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males
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 which
are
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is
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 19% and 49% respectively, despite
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man
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men
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spend
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spending
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time
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of
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on
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 gardening
was
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apply
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the
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apply
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at 14% which is more than
women
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 (2%).
On the other hand
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,
lowest
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the lowest
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 afternoon
time
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 was staying in bed, visiting town, playing
sport
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sports
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 and drinking which accounted for under 5% in both genders.
Man
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 jobless person watch
TV
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 most at just 14%, even though
women
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 do
housework
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 highest 21%)

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, housework, tv, man, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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