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The pie charts below show the comparison of exports in Great Britain over five years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of exports in Great Britain over five years.
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Two
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The two
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 pie charts above illustrate the comparison of various
sectors
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sectors'
sector's
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 contributions to the exports in Great Britain during 2010 and 2015. During the time period given, the machinery
sector
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 was the major
contributor
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,
while
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 the organic chemicals
sector
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 contributed the least. In 2010, machinery, vehicles, and pharmaceuticals
are
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were
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 the three highest
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contributor
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contributors
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, which accounted for 29%, 28% and 27% of exports in the UK, respectively. Despite some changes
of
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in
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 percentage in 2015,
these three
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this three sector
these three sectors
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sector
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 remained to be the major
contributor
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. In 2015, both
machinery
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the machinery
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 and vehicles
sector
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 experienced a slight increase of 1%,
while
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 the pharmaceuticals
sector
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 experienced
9
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a 9
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% decrease in its contribution.
Organic
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The organic
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 chemicals
sector
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 contributed the least among any other
sector
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 in both 2010 and 2015.
This
Linking Words
 particular
sector
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 only contributed
for
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to
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 7% of
export
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exports
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 in 2010.
Although
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 there was a slight increase of 3% in 2025,
this
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sector
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 remained to be the least
contributor
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of
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to
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 exports in the UK.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sector, contributor with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "comparison" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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