The pie charts below show the comparison of exports in Great Britain over five years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of exports in Great Britain over five years.
Two
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pie charts above illustrate the comparison of various
sectors
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sectors'
sector's
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contributions to the exports in Great Britain during 2010 and 2015. During the time period given, the machinery
sector
was the major
contributor
,
while
the organic chemicals
sector
contributed the least. In 2010, machinery, vehicles, and pharmaceuticals
are
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were
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the three highest
contributor
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contributors
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, which accounted for 29%, 28% and 27% of exports in the UK, respectively. Despite some changes
of
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in
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percentage in 2015,
these three
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this three sector
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sector
remained to be the major
contributor
. In 2015, both
machinery
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the machinery
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and vehicles
sector
experienced a slight increase of 1%,
while
the pharmaceuticals
sector
experienced
9
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a 9
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% decrease in its contribution.
Organic
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The organic
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chemicals
sector
contributed the least among any other
sector
in both 2010 and 2015.
This
particular
sector
only contributed
for
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7% of
export
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exports
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in 2010.
Although
there was a slight increase of 3% in 2025,
this
sector
remained to be the least
contributor
of
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exports in the UK.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sector, contributor with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "comparison" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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