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As computers translate quickly and accurately, learning foreign languages is a waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#computers #languages #waste #time
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Nowadays, many
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 a
computer
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 faster and
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extremely
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a
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, their eyes become dim, humans gain weight. Another significant reason can be that attempts are
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Firstly
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health. They always get fit two eyes. Maybe, it has benefits from mental. I frequently used that from
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the
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my future purpose. In conclusion, many
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it, especially, many youngest.
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 limit practising. It has too
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Hence
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the fast translator and it has lots of achievements.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Computers are proficient in certain domains but struggle with complex language nuances
  • Machine translation lacks human touch and may not capture context accurately
  • Learning a foreign language is a valuable investment in personal development
  • Language learning fosters empathy and appreciation for different cultures
  • Multilingual individuals are in high demand in the job market
  • Acquiring new languages expands one's horizons and opens doors to new opportunities
  • Bilingualism enhances cognitive flexibility and problem-solving abilities
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