Online shopping has become more popular than before.discuss causes and effects of this trend.

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Online shopping has become more exciting and widespread in recent times because of new technology.
However
, there are effects of expansion
eshopping
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shopping
.
This
essay will examine the reasons and effects of online shopping.
In
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one
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the one
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hand, online shopping has
big
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a big
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impact
of
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on
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way
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the way
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of shopping and
make
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change
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a change
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of
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in
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todays
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shopping as it
let
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people
shopping
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which will
offer
more
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a more
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easy way of shopping and reduce
time
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the time
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that
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spent by
people
to
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for
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normal shopping.
Furthermore
, it
offer
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different
brand
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brands
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from all countries around the world
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at
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very good
price
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prices
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because of the low cost of marketing and
other cost
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another cost
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that depend
to
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on offering
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offer
the
products
.
In addition
, shopping can be more secure for
people
as they are shopping online from home or
other place
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another place
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that
make
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them save. For
inctance
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instance
,online shopping delivers
products
to houses in a very
safety
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way.
On the other hand
, the impact of online shopping on
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traditional
shop
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is very important as there is
decrease
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a decrease
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of
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people
that
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shopping from normal
shop
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which will
make
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big
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a big
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risk.
However
, the traditional
shop
offers the physical experience of
products
to
offer
a good option for shopping but
people
perfer
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prefer
to buy from online shopping because of low
price
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prices
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.
For example
,
website
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websites
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like
aliexpress
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Aliexpress
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offers
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offer
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many
products
with
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at
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very low
price
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prices
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compare
compared
campare
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compared
to normal
shop
To conclude
, I believe that the should government take the role of controlling online shopping which will reduce the impact that may effects on traditional shops.
In addition
,
people
should not less the experience of shopping from mail and life the moment of real shopping.
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introduction & conclusion
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linking words
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main points development
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task response
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