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The pie charts below show the comparison of exports in Great Britain over five years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of exports in Great Britain over five years.
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The pie charts above illustrate the comparison between 2010's and 2015's exports of several
commodities
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 in Great Britain. There are five
commodities
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 the export data has presented in the form of
percentage
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. Those five
commodities
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 presented are machinery, vehicles, pharmaceuticals, plastics and organic chemicals. From the two pie charts, it can be seen that over those five years, there
is
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 no dramatic rise
of
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 exports
in
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 any commodity. The maximum increase is only 4% for plastic material. It is
then
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 followed by organic chemicals with
the
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a
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 rise
as
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 much as 3%. What happened to pharmaceutical products is quite the contrary, where there is
8
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an 8
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% extreme plunge in total.
Whereas
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 the other two
commodities
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 which are machinery and vehicles, there is only
1
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a 1
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% improvement in 2015 from the previous year of 2010. In conclusion, there is quite a trend for plastic use to have
huge
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 increment in demand than
other
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the other
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 four
commodities
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words commodities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "comparison" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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