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Writing Samples
Band 6

Your office building dosen't have parking available. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: - Explain the problem - Sugget a soultion - Say why parking will benefit all employees

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Dear Mr. George I am writing
this
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 letter to draw your attention to the problem of the unavailability of a spacious parking space. Like me all the other employees are using their personal vehicles to commute to work, on a daily basis I waste at least 25
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 reserving street parking. Those street parking are unable to provide us
vehicle
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 security and are expensive as well. To solve
this
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 problem our office should utilise an empty plot next to our building in a separate parking zone, which will be time efficient and less stressful. If our office building is able to facilitate personalised parking
to
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 all members of the company,
then
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 it would be beneficial for both the organization and employees.
This
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 facility will reduce our time and efforts to reserve street parking and workers will circulate their extra time and energy to their daily office tasks. Thank you for your consideration. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Vairag.

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task achievement
Consider adding more details to support your suggestions. For example, mentioning specific benefits of a dedicated parking area could help strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses clearly on a single idea to enhance readability and coherence. For instance, separating your description of the problem and the proposed solution into different paragraphs would improve the structure.
coherence and cohesion
Check for minor grammatical errors and word choice issues, as these can slightly detract from the overall clarity of your message. For example, 'those street parking' could be corrected to 'that street parking'.
task achievement
The letter effectively identifies a common issue faced by employees, creating a connection with the reader.
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Your tone is polite and professional, which is important when communicating with management.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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