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The maps below show an Industrial area in the town of Norton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an Industrial area in the town of Norton, and planned future development of the site.
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The maps illustrate an industrial
area
 in the town of Norbiton
,
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 and planned future development of the site. Generally, a comparison of
two
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 maps reveals a change from
industrial
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an industrial
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area
 to
living
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a living
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 landscape. In the first map buildings
in
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land
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the land
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 were much
less
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 with a large empty space, but by the future
plan
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 it would be filled by houses and
another infrastructional places
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,
as
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school
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 and
shop
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. The most
dramatically
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 change took place on the north
side
 of
land
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the land
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,
here
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where
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 was built a bridge, which connects two sides of
river
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the river
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.
Moreover
, on the north
side
 of the
river
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river,
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 it will be built a big housing. Only a few buildings on the first map save keep their place, on the north-east
side
 of the
area
 two factories will be reconstructed
to
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a
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housing.
Furthermore
, there is added a new ring road
on
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 the entrance to the living
area
.
According to
 the second
map
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 the town on the west
side
 would not expand to the land.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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