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The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one country, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.

The graph below shows information about the use of public transport in one country, by age group and location of residence, in 2016.
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The following graph presents data regarding the usage of public transport in a particular nation in 2016, broken down by
age
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 bracket and place of residency.
Overall
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, the graph indicates that compared to other individuals, those who live in large cities use collective transport at higher rates throughout the majority of
age
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 categories. The
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 range of 31 to 45 is the greatest for large urban areas when it comes to using public transit, peaking at almost 65%.
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, the
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 range of 16 to 30 accounts for around 25% of all
residents
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 usage. For residents of large cities, the usage begins at almost 40% for those in the 0–15
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 group, rises steadily to a peak in the 31–45
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 group, and
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 sharply decreases as one gets older, reaching approximately 10% for those in the 76+
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 group.
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, among other inhabitants, the percentage of people who use public transport ranges from 10% to 30% from ages 0 to 75, but for those 76 and older, it falls off significantly to less than 10%.

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