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The diagram shows for university entry for high school graduates

The diagram shows for university entry for high school graduates
The diagram illustrates the procedure for high school
graduates
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 to
entry
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enter
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 as
university
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student
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students
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. There are two major steps
for
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this
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 process.
In addition
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, there are other stages that the
graduates
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 should through depending on their admission status. First things
first,
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this
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 process is only for high school
graduates
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. After graduation, they have to complete an application form which they can download from the
university
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 website.
Then
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, they need to send the application to the
university
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 admin. There are three results of
acceptance
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 status which are rejection, provisional
acceptance
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, and
acceptance
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 complete enrolment.
Firstly
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, if they get the air, they have two options, either cancel the application or submit another form for an alternative course.
Secondly
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, high school
graduates
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also
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 can get provisional
acceptance
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 meaning there are more documents that should be handed. The
last
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 result they can get is
acceptance
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. Both provisional and full
acceptance
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 will be announced to applicants
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apply
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two weeks after the submission. When they get accepted, they need to select subjects. Later, they have to register with the dean and
finally
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 enter the
university
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.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, university, acceptance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • competitiveness
  • admission criteria
  • extracurricular activities
  • personal statements
  • standardized testing
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • diversity and inclusion
  • university rankings
  • application process
  • academic grades
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