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Some people think that men and women have different qualities, therfore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extent fo you agree or disagree

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There is a
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controversial
 argument
whether
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about whether
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 certain careers are more suitable for either
men
 or
women
. The
autor
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author
 contends that
men
 and
women
 are equal in terms of potential and qualities
, thereby
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and, thereby
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, have the same opportunities in their chosen
field
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fields
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. It must be acknowledged that currently,
both
men
 and
women
 do not have any considerable differences regarding biological body and intellectual thinking,
hence
,
both
men
 and
women
 have
theor
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their
the
 potential to do well in their
job
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jobs
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.
Additionally
, judging a person's progression through their gender will burry gifted individuals down.
As a result
, some people will never have the
opportunities
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opportunity
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 to show off their talents.
Males
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Male
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 and
females
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female
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 distribution in
workplace
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the workplace
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 is another point to consider. To justify, a workplace with either males or females
dominated
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 the population will lead to unpredictable risks
afterward
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afterwards
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.
For instance
, some specific careers need
both
men
 and
women
 to maintain
the
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apply
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harmony
as well as
 operate normally.
Therefore
,
intergrating
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integrating
 males and females together will boost the work's efficiency and
also
 the quality in
workplace
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the workplace
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. Some critics said that there are plenty of jobs that
required
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require
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 certain characteristics like
physically fit
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physical fitness
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 or flexibility that
only
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are only
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 suitable for one gender.
This
maybe
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may be
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 true but all of those characteristics can be obtained
throughout
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through
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 hard-working and practical experiences.
Therefore
, individuals have
their
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the
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 right to follow their
dream
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dreams
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 regardless of sex. In conclusion,
both
men
 and
women
 can do
as well as
 their counterparts in every
jobs
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job
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. Thereby, the norm
of
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that
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 each gender will have different
perfomances
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performances
performance
 in certain works is untrue in
this
mordern
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modern
 society.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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