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The chart below shows the oercantage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Whales between 1918 and 2011.

The chart below shows the oercantage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Whales between 1918 and 2011.
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The line graph gives proportion of the houses in the UK and in Wales by classifying them into two categories: premises of the people who
live
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lived
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 in it or rented, between 1918
to
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and
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 2011.
Overall
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, the number of owned houses rose during the whole
period
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 and the
rented-accommodation
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rented accommodation
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 fell, they both were at the same level in 1971 and the
overall
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 trend can be described as a switch between two accommodations. Premises that are owned by people
live
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who live
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 in them increased dramatically during the
period
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. It started at a quarter of
whole
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the whole
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 and rose to just above 30%
percent
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per cent
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 and
remaind
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remained
remain
 around there in 1939 and 1953. It showed a steady increase until 2001 to just above 70% and fell to around 65% in the
finel
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final
 year. Rented accommodation was by far the
higher
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highest
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 one with almost 80% at the beginning of the
period
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 and showed a steady
fell
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fall
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 in every decade from 1953 to 1991, after remaining nearly around the
last
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 decade it rose to just above 35%, first time
in
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for
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 60-year
period
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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